Y2Julio Posted October 10, 2008 Share #1 Posted October 10, 2008 Despido Final By Julio C. despido final cada dia mas que pasa, contigo a su lado y no conmigo, es un golpe mas a mi corason con el martillo que clava el clavo mas profundo en mi si tu te casas con el, sera el golpe fatal para mi en este verso, que yo escribi para ti sera el ultimo despido a ti, sera el ultimo adios que escucharas con estas palabras acceptare que jamas seras para mi seras para mi que es mejor resignarme y aceptar la derrota aceptar este cruel destino en esta vida loca pedir a dios que traiga mi final porque es lo mismo,que sin ti estar y al fin matar este dolor en mi la mujer que antes por cual era mi razon para vivir ahora es la razon por cual yo me quiero morir que sin ti no sere feliz que sin ti para que vivir? a la misma vez que deseo habarte conocido antes que tu conociera a el tambien deseo jamas haberte conocido, ni pensar en tu piel de esta vida ya no puedo aguantar mas dolor y desamor por eso le pido a dios que traiga mi muertepor favor no tenerte a ti y estar muerto y al fin matar este dolor y eso sera el ultimo despido de mi para ti, y eso sera el ultimo adios que escucharas salir de mi que para donde me voy, jamas me volveras a ver, ni volver a escuchar mi voz adios, te deseo lo mejor adios, te quiero amor adios, nunca te olvidare adios..un dia de estos morire Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
N-Trizzy2609 Posted October 10, 2008 Share #2 Posted October 10, 2008 This is soo good though I can't read some of it because I can't understand some of it! lol. I like it thoo Mui Grasias (terrible for a Puerto Rican huh?) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 10, 2008 Author Share #3 Posted October 10, 2008 Let me guess, born here? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
N-Trizzy2609 Posted October 10, 2008 Share #4 Posted October 10, 2008 Yup! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 10, 2008 Author Share #5 Posted October 10, 2008 I could translate it to English but I'm not sure if it would keep it's general mood. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 10, 2008 Author Share #6 Posted October 10, 2008 Here it is in English. Man, it sounds super emo lol Final Goodbye With each day that passes by, you with him instead of me is a another hit more towards my heart with the hammer that hammers down the nail deeper inside of me. If you were to marry him, it would be a fatal blow for me In this verse, that I wrote for you It will be the last farewell for you, It will be the last goodbye you'll hear. With these words I'll accept that you'll never be mine, be mine. That it's better to resign and accept defeat. Accept this cruel destiny in this crazy life. Ask god to bring my end because it would the same as not having you and at last kill this pain inside of mi. The woman that used to be mi reason to live now is the reason for which I wish to die. Without you, I wont be happy without you, why live? At the same time that I wish I had met you before you met him I also wish that I had never met you, nor think about your skin of this life I can no longer cope with more pain and unlove it is because of this, that I ask god to bring my death Not have you, be dead and finally kill this pain and this will be the last farewell for you and this will be the last goodbye you'll hear from me where I'm going you'll never see me again nor hear my voice Goodbye, I wish you the best Goodbye, I love you my love Goodbye, I'll never forget you Goodbye, one of these days I'll die. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cait Sith Posted October 10, 2008 Share #7 Posted October 10, 2008 Great job......I felt the mood of that poem. So deep and lonely. Honestly, it relates to alot of things some people would actually think at their time like that... Awesome job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RokuSix Posted October 10, 2008 Share #8 Posted October 10, 2008 I felt the mood perfectly fine in English. I really love it...though it makes me feel awfully sad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 10, 2008 Author Share #9 Posted October 10, 2008 I felt the mood perfectly fine in English. I really love it...though it makes me feel awfully sad. That's Bachata for you (Spanish version of the blues), It's all about desamor (unlove). I need to stop being lazy and finally make it into a song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJr142 Posted October 11, 2008 Share #10 Posted October 11, 2008 Knew the spanish words, It made me feel the same way. (eso no me hace llorar, pero yo soy triste). What i was saying was, it doesnt make me cry, but it makes me sad. From Puerto Rico. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pablo M 201 Posted October 11, 2008 Share #11 Posted October 11, 2008 Ta bueno ta bueno. Para mi, me gusto mucho! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 12, 2008 Author Share #12 Posted October 12, 2008 Ta bueno ta bueno. Para mi, me gusto mucho! Gracias! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul P Posted October 12, 2008 Share #13 Posted October 12, 2008 It does have a mood in English! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
7LineFan Posted October 12, 2008 Share #14 Posted October 12, 2008 Wow, great poem. And yeah, kinda emo, especially if you set it to music made by a band with two guitars, a bass, a drum set, and a vocalist... then you may have millions of teenage girls singing along to it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y2Julio Posted October 12, 2008 Author Share #15 Posted October 12, 2008 lol well I made it for some spanish blues. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
buswizard Posted December 14, 2008 Share #16 Posted December 14, 2008 It is very sad. But it was also a good poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MTR Admiralty Posted December 14, 2008 Share #17 Posted December 14, 2008 Very good! Still keeps the mood even in English. Wish I took Spanish instead of French. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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